Thread:RainEStar/@comment-25542469-20180526163114/@comment-27589621-20180601185641

Conceptually? Me likey!

Back to your older post: Costume change makes sense if you don't want everyone having a hoodie (which would be kinda wierd). His hair seems to be doing a good job concealing his face, helping his androgynous appearance. Having a plushie is a good memento, speaks to his character, and again, helps his andogynousness. His Vanguard circle though... that's a lot of colors to describe. Visually, its a lot, but its worse in a story where you would have to describe it. I'd suggest simplifying it.

Story set up looks good. I'd suggest taking this part of it and outlining a more specific timeline (what events, when a chracter appears vs when their introduced, etc). Blank Vanguard cards (kinda like depend cards) are kinda iffy on how much they make sense, but its not out of the realm of possibility. And speaking of possibilities, does he have psyqualia, excessive stride force, or some other thing about him that allows him to amke a connection to these units? It seems emotions are a big thing, but I'm not quite sure how it ties in to the connection he has.

Looks like dreams are the big thing here, which means everyone who's important would be driven by one (reminds me of Selctor Wixoss and their wishes). So if dreams are the link and emoitions are the power, then all we need to do is figure otu how its all connected.